Drawings and shit.

[Derelict]

This is my thread for posting shit I've made for stuff. Drawings, stuff I've written, etc.

I'll update it every once in a while, seeing as I hate when people make new threads for single pieces of art. Whatever, though.


Here's a bunch of shit I've done:

Sketches
My sister at grad (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/kristin.png)
Self-portrait (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/Ryan.png)
Defero 1 (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/Defero.png)
Defero 2 (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/Defero2.png)

Drawings
Superman (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/photos-1.png)
Batman (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/DCFC0080-1.png)
Batman (with wings!!) (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/bat2123.png)
Random cartoon in progress (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/dude.png)
Random cartoon completed (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/dude-finished.png)

Animations
Butterfly (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=butterfly.flv)
Superhero (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=superhero-extended.flv)
Drawing a head (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=head-drawing.flv)
A dude getting crushed (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=crushed-1.flv)

Photos
Clouds (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/039.png)
Beach (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/070.png)
Fog (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/fogtrees.png)
Lake (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/Lake.jpg)
Fire (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/mountain.png)
Meadow (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/MtWashington3.png)
Lamp post (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/sunset2.png)
Dock (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/TheSpitBay.jpg)

Poems (http://forums.explosm.net/showpost.php?p=1316161&postcount=45)
(I'm not a poet, I just like to write stuff, so don't hesitate to give me some pointers.)


Comments, critique, calling me gay, etc.

[Mobius]

You could be a good tattoo artist maybe. The Defero ones were nice though, brought some nice memories back.

[letteratlantic]

I love the Batman one. It is probably because I love batman. But the second one of Defero looks like Keanu Reeves to me.

[Relaps]

Cameras suck for drawings.

But from what I could see, some srs cool shit there.

[Derelict]

Tattoo artist, that's something I've definitely never thought of before. I do have a pretty steady hand so I suppose I shouldn't rule it out.
And yeah, I paused before posting the Defero ones, God rest his soul.
Thanks, man.

Yeah, Relaps, I only took the photos for those because my scanner's been broken for the past few months and I only recently got it fixed. I didn't want to use a camera, but it was necessary.

But the second one of Defero looks like Keanu Reeves to me.

:indiff:


Thanks for the comments, guys! ({)

[DieHard]

Wow Derelict, I am very impressed by your work.

[Lag]

I see the drawings but where's the shit?

Really nice pencil work.

[Derelict]

Wow Derelict, I am very impressed by your work.
I see the drawings but where's the shit?

Really nice pencil work.

Thanks, guys. I appreciate it.

[Killer Carebear]

You're really good at making people look real. Nothing looked disproportional or awkward.
Also, ur ghey, etc.

And nine comments in 10 minutes.. WHOA.

Err, 8. I'm special.

[Veeduck]

Very nice. Though I think you need to work on the shading, particularly in your more realistic works, like the one of your sister. There isn't nearly enough value and so the picture looks flat and lifeless.

You do draw features really well though, and I love the superheroes. Awesome.

[Derelict]

I've never been really good at shading, I need to work on that. Thanks, man.

And nine comments in 10 minutes.. WHOA.

Err, 8. I'm special.
Well, two of them are me...

[Killer Carebear]

I'm an idiot either way.

[Veeduck]

You could try the chiaroscuro style shading. Really dark shadows and really white highlights, with some midtones - it's what they tend to teach art students here first, before teaching them subtler shading styles.

[Shmuh]

When I die, will you draw pictures of me? :)

Also, awesome drawings. I agree with being a tattoo artist.

[Raxo]

The first dude was my favorite, seems like he could be part of a comic or something.

[flodprfekshun]

Other than the shading like Vee mentioned they seem great to me. I don't know what you find difficult about shading, but if you use darker and lighter pencils it's a lot easier than just one.

[Derelict]

I do all of my drawing with whatever pencil I can find. I've actually tried using different ones.

[flodprfekshun]

Well what do you find hard about the shading then? (just interested in helping btw)

[Matterialize]

And you told me you couldn't draw, you jackass.

[Lynley]

Thanks for sharing these with us. I like them.

Also, I haven't been able to bring myself to delete any messages I got from Defero :\ I had just really started talking to him when he died.

[Derelict]

Well what do you find hard about the shading then? (just interested in helping btw)

I never seem to be able to do it right. I guess I just have a terrible eye for shadows.
And you told me you couldn't draw, you jackass.

Not to your caliber, anyway. :rolleyes:
Seriously.
Thanks for sharing these with us. I like them.

Also, I haven't been able to bring myself to delete any messages I got from Defero :\ I had just really started talking to him when he died.

Yeah, it's been tough. He's a great guy.


Thanks again, everyone. I really appreciate all the input! (L)

[Assassin]

The Batman guy is so awesome. The rest is pretty good aswell

[Derelict]

If I can find the drawings of Batman, Superman, Defero, and my sister I'll scan those and replace the links. Just so you guys can get a better view of them. They're pretty blurry right now.

[inpachi3]

I AM A NERD. NOONE CARES WHAT I HAVE TO SAY ANYMORE.

[flodprfekshun]

I never seem to be able to do it right. I guess I just have a terrible eye for shadows.

Look at the shadows as seperate shapes, if you don't already. If you lightly outline them, like the really dark areas, the medium tones, and the lighter shades, then fill it in, it's much easier. All you have to do at that point is blend.

[Ox]

Those kick balls. Your lettering on Superman suck balls though. Not necessarilly the same balls, but balls none the less.

Sexy work.

[Derelict]

Thanks Ox. I remember you commenting on the letters on Superman once before too. I don't know why I added them, really.

Also, flod, I'll try that. Thanks.

[Derelict]

Hey look a double post! Anyway, I animated a dude shooting an arrow at a butterfly. This (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=butterfly.flv) definitely falls under the "shit" part of the thread.

Took me three days to do it since I did about 8 frames each day. :indiff: I'm lazy and slow.

Bare in mind though, that this is the third animation I've ever created. (on paper anyway)

[Lissa]

That is a sexy Batman. :heya:

[hzac]

Those were glorified badass.

Batman kicked ass.

[Candystripe]

I love the first Defero! Batman is relatively badass looking, as well.

[Dacada]

Hey look a double post! Anyway, I animated a dude shooting an arrow at a butterfly. This (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/?action=view&current=butterfly.flv) definitely falls under the "shit" part of the thread.

Took me three days to do it since I did about 8 frames each day. :indiff: I'm lazy and slow.

Bare in mind though, that this is the third animation I've ever created. (on paper anyway)
It wasn't so bad, just a bit choppy.

[Arielcz]

You are an artist.

[Derelict]

Oh hey, bumping my thread to add this (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/Ryan.png) I made for that self-portrait thread and this little animation (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=superhero-extended.flv) I made today. Yay!

[Fodniethan]

Haha I love the little flying dude he's awesome.

[Matterialize]

Much better animation than the first one, man. You just need more frames so it's smoother. (I know it's a pain to draw twice as many frames, but still)

[Derelict]

I'm slowly getting the hang of it. Very slowly.

[Derelict]

Another shitty animation. (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=head-drawing.flv)

Not sure what's up with the terrible quality of video. (terrible quality of drawing is me.)

[Panda]

You really do have a true tallent. Shapes and outlines are done very well. The shading isn't that bad IMO, I think it's good nontheless. Very nice work.

[Derelict]

Some guy getting crushed by a 1000lb weight. (http://s103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/?action=view&current=crushed-1.flv)

[Derelict]

You really do have a true tallent. Shapes and outlines are done very well. The shading isn't that bad IMO, I think it's good nontheless. Very nice work.

Thanks, man. I still can't shade well but it's getting there. I can sketch people and objects no problem, it's just their shadows that don't seem to translate onto paper very easily.

Also everyone go look at the people I drew in the Spam Forum. They're not real potraits or anything, just random shit I come up with. I think it's worthy of the "shit" part of this thread. SPAME (http://forums.explosm.net/showthread.php?t=15155)

[Plasma]

I really like that self portrait. I think it looks really really good.

I think you should do the animations again, with incredible detail. I bet they'd be really great. Nonetheless, I think they're great.

Ox is right, the Superman lettering is bad, but it's the only bad part I see.

The drawing of your sister is really good, too.

You're actually pretty good at drawing people.

[Matterialize]

Smooth head movement on the crushed guy, dude. Looks good.

[JW]

That Dude In Progress (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Random%20Shit/dude.png) sorta reminds me of Michael Jackson...

[Derelict]

Woah, haven't updated this thread in a very long time.

Anyway, just wrote a poem.

"As A Mariner"

Veiled on the sinking ship, fog rolling in
Souls lost, thinking dim, waves take their win

Unheard through your mortal word, final bell is rung
Eyes close, throat open, water meets with lung
Voiceless noise, creeping in, footsteps down the hall
Lost in black, vision cracked, no one hears the call

Trapped within this hellish cold, sweat drips down my brow
My noose was hung, knot was pulled, thoughts escape me now
Soaked in fear, nothing more, promise made in vain
None know why we try to fly, we fall within the rain

This shell will grow no older, no longer strong and proud
Hooded figure on my shoulder, dressed in bloodied shroud
Wordless page, forgotten name, wearing horns and hate
Hope has fled, doubts remain, freedom taunting fate

Darkness gathered at my feet, my mind runs through the past
My heart has time for one more beat, I've found the gate at last.


I am in no way a poet, and not even a songwriter, so I'm oblivious to poetry structure. Criticism will be met well.


I had an idea for another poem, so myah:

"Chemical Lament"

Breathing fire, getting higher
Pushing through the skin
Addicted liar, sinking mire
Clawing at the sin

Pricking vein, blood dilution
I'm insane, mind confusion
Sorry, friends, I lost the way
I thought I'd make it one more day

Show me the road, just take my hand
I won't look down, it's far to land
Climb the ladder, grab the light
Lose my grip, I lose the fight

Bring me back from this deep pit
The walls are wet and not well lit
Crawling, falling, find my throne
Coughing laugh, left alone

Echoes mirror my own scream
Needle keeps me in this dream
Taunting me with thoughts of bliss
Friends are gone, I'm left with this

My hands are numb, I am content
Lost again, my life is spent
Try and try to break away
Tomorrow's just another day


Woah, apparently I'm on a roll. Here's another one:

"Hunger"

Ravens circle, it's almost time
Blood on my hands, it isn't mine
Wishing to see my body drop
Human flesh, a hunter's crop

Though the anger has come and gone
It seems a distance from here to dawn
I think that harvest time has come
It's not my mouth the screams are from

Guilt was once a word I knew
Replaced with lust that grew and grew
Children, elders, it matters not
The flesh, the taste, damnation wrought

This house the last, I tell myself
Retire my blade to dusty shelf
I'm at the door, the lock is open
I'm wanting more, restraint is broken

Sunlight breaks, morning hour
Shadows fade, I devour
Defender angry, pulls out his gun
Pierce my flesh, I've had my fun

Blood surrounds me, this time my own
The man is yelling, distant drone
My pain is gone, off to hell
A wasted life now wasted shell


It's late, but I'm bored.

"Hypocrisy"

Creator is crying, your planet is dying
Heaven is distant, you're not even trying
Faith is fleeting, life is bleeding
Thoughts persistant, sarcastic greeting

One step closer, one step nearer
Laughing at you through the mirror
Bring me truth, relfection wants thee
I see right through that which haunts me

Seventh day, eleventh hour
Find a corner so you can cower
Human loathing, global burning
Gutters flowing, endless turning

Take the credit, but not the blame
Point your finger, use your name
Save the Earth, but not the city
Voices birth Nature's pity

Shout your orders with broken crown
Your perch above us, push us down
Want our help but not opinion
On your own, yet I'm your minion

"Without A Bang"

Through this storm you walked beside me, always in denial
Though my death you would regret, my grave you would defile
My likeness seems to haunt you, with every lasting breath
You think you will escape me in the arms of waiting death

Rain is tapping at your window, question your whole life
Vengeance is my motive, in my back you rest your knife
Through the dark I see the guilt, eating at your soul
Keep on trying as you will, you'll never fill this hole

Unseen you feel my presence, whisper on your neck
Linger with me for a moment, fear is kept in check
Apathetic, try to look, sit and have a word
The time for talk is over, your protest is unheard

I helped you build this fortune, foundation made of lies
You called yourself my friend, an evil in disguise
Now you know what I must do, there is no other way
Peace won't come without a bang, the trigger has its say

[Derelict]

Edited these into other post.

[Derelict]

Nothing to see here.

[Quadros]

I'll go through these at length if you want but the news isn't good I'm afraid. They're kind of shit, but there are some lines worth saving, so I can either help you salvage these, or just identify the decent lines worth keeping?

Actually the first one's kind of ok apart from the dire start and some clumsy lines.

[Derelict]

I'd appreciate just identifying which lines are worth keeping. Like I said, I've never written poetry, so I kind of just started with some cool words and worked shit around them. I'm not even a fan of poetry, I was listening to Opeth and got inspired.

[Quadros]

Woah, haven't updated this thread in a very long time.

Anyway, just wrote a poem.

"As A Mariner"

Veiled on the sinking ship, fog rolling in
Souls lost, thinking dim, waves take their win

Unheard through your mortal word, final bell is rung
Eyes close, throat open, water meets with lung
Voiceless noise, creeping in, footsteps down the hall
Lost in black, vision cracked, no one hears the call

Trapped within this hellish cold, sweat drips down my brow
My noose was hung, knot was pulled, thoughts escape me now
Soaked in fear, nothing more, promise made in vain
None know why we try to fly, we fall within the rain

This shell will grow no older, no longer strong and proud
Hooded figure on my shoulder, dressed in bloodied shroud
Wordless page, forgotten name, wearing horns and hate
Hope has fled, doubts remain, freedom taunting fate

Darkness gathered at my feet, my mind runs through the past
My heart has time for one more beat, I've found the gate at last.


I am in no way a poet, and not even a songwriter, so I'm oblivious to poetry structure. Criticism will be met well.


I had an idea for another poem, so myah:

"Chemical Lament"

Breathing fire, getting higher
Pushing through the skin
Addicted liar, sinking mire
Clawing at the sin

Pricking vein, blood dilution
I'm insane, mind confusion
Sorry, friends, I lost the way
I thought I'd make it one more day

Show me the road, just take my hand
I won't look down, it's far to land
Climb the ladder, grab the light
Lose my grip, I lose the fight

Bring me back from this deep pit
The walls are wet and not well lit
Crawling, falling, find my throne
Coughing laugh, left alone

Echoes mirror my own scream
Needle keeps me in this dream
Taunting me with thoughts of bliss
Friends are gone, I'm left with this

My hands are numb, I am content
Lost again, my life is spent
Try and try to break away
Tomorrow's just another day


Woah, apparently I'm on a roll. Here's another one:

"Hunger"

Ravens circle, it's almost time
Blood on my hands, it isn't mine
Wishing to see my body drop
Human flesh, a hunter's crop

Though the anger has come and gone
It seems a distance from here to dawn
I think that harvest time has come
It's not my mouth the screams are from

Guilt was once a word I knew
Replaced with lust that grew and grew
Children, elders, it matters not
The flesh, the taste, damnation wrought

This house the last, I tell myself
Retire my blade to dusty shelf
I'm at the door, the lock is open
I'm wanting more, restraint is broken

Sunlight breaks, morning hour
Shadows fade, I devour
Defender angry, pulls out his gun
Pierce my flesh, I've had my fun

Blood surrounds me, this time my own
The man is yelling, distant drone
My pain is gone, off to hell
A wasted life now wasted shell


It's late, but I'm bored.

"Hypocrisy"

Creator is crying, your planet is dying
Heaven is distant, you're not even trying
Faith is fleeting, life is bleeding
Thoughts persistant, sarcastic greeting

One step closer, one step nearer
Laughing at you through the mirror
Bring me truth, relfection wants thee
I see right through that which haunts me

Seventh day, eleventh hour
Find a corner so you can cower
Human loathing, global burning
Gutters flowing, endless turning

Take the credit, but not the blame
Point your finger, use your name
Save the Earth, but not the city
Voices birth Nature's pity

Shout your orders with broken crown
Your perch above us, push us down
Want our help but not opinion
On your own, yet I'm your minion

"Without A Bang"

Through this storm you walked beside me, always in denial
Though my death you would regret, my grave you would defile
My likeness seems to haunt you, with every lasting breath
You think you will escape me in the arms of waiting death

Rain is tapping at your window, question your whole life
Vengeance is my motive, in my back you rest your knife
Through the dark I see the guilt, eating at your soul
Keep on trying as you will, you'll never fill this hole

Unseen you feel my presence, whisper on your neck
Linger with me for a moment, fear is kept in check
Apathetic, try to look, sit and have a word
The time for talk is over, your protest is unheard

I helped you build this fortune, foundation made of lies
You called yourself my friend, an evil in disguise
Now you know what I must do, there is no other way
Peace won't come without a bang, the trigger has its say

The good lines are in red. My main beef was the way you started each poem. The lines are near identical in form and effect, it's like you discovered this worked once, or were taught to do it, and you can't do it any other way. Indeed, it's the form almost every line in your poems, two distinct but linked ideas broken by a comma, and among other things it's this lake of variety that drags your poems down, because it makes the decent lines blend in with the mundane.

[Derelict]

After the third one I was like, "Yeah, this is getting boring." I should read more poetry and learn a bit about variety, I guess. Thanks for the critique, man.

[Derelict]

OK, well I've been pretty confused lately as to what the fuck I'm going to do to make money throughout my life. I've gone through a few ideas already but lately I've been entertaining the idea of photography. I know there are a ton of teens and kids out there taking photos of flowers and trees and sunsets and calling themselves photographers, but I still think given some dedication I might pull this off. I've talked to some people who do a couple weddings each month and random shit the rest of the time and make enough to live off.

I can't think of a real life application for any of my photos beyond National Geographic or some shit, or whether I'm just kidding myself, but here are some photos I've taken:
Clouds (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/039.png)
Beach (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/070.png)
Fog (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/fogtrees.png)
Lake (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/Lake.jpg)
Fire (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/mountain.png)
Meadow (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/MtWashington3.png)
Lamp post (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/sunset2.png)
Dock (http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m134/derelict_01/Photos/TheSpitBay.jpg)

EDIT: I should probably mention all of my photos are taken with my camera phone. If I had money I'd buy a good camera, but I think the quality is pretty decent, so whatever.

[HappyPalooza]

I really like Clouds, Beach, Fog, and Fire, but I can't give actual critiques or anything because I don't know shit about photography. Cool shit though.

[abbey]

I don't know, Derelict, they're all pretty basic. It's easy to take a nice picture of nature. The problem is that they're not very interesting.

I do see some use of the rule of thirds in your photos, which is good. Did you already know about that, or was it instinctive?

If you're serious about photography, you should read up on the elements of design (http://www.johnlovett.com/test.htm) as well as some more about the rule of thirds (http://digital-photography-school.com/rule-of-thirds).

This website (http://photoinf.com/General/Robert_Berdan/Composition_and_the_Elements_of_Visual_Design.htm) looks really comprehensive, although I didn't read through the whole thing.

As for the photo quality, your camera phone looks good enough to get you started. Camera phones just typically lack good contrast and clean edges, which can be pretty important depending on what you're photographing. Keep that in mind.

Once you read through a bit of the links I posted, I'd be interested to see what you come up with.

EDIT: Your avatar totally fooled me into thinking you were Tweek. :eyespop:

[Derelict]

I kind of just took photos of stuff that looked cool. You're right, though, they're all really basic. I'd like to start taking some more interesting photos but I wasn't sure where to start. Thanks for the sites. I'll read through them. I really appreciate the input.

[Dacada]

The only one I liked was fog, and not because it really looked like an interesting photo but because it looked like a screencap from some fucking horrifying movie, probably partially because of the quality of the camera.

If you're having trouble, try working in black and white. If you can make it work in grayscale you know you're an okay photographer and don't have to use colour as a crutch.

I don't have much more to say, other than they're just not very interesting. I am very biased against nature photography though. You see so much of it that it REALLY has to be crazy for it to work for me.