View Full Version : Round 1-Spiffy13 VS Lag
Pick who goes first and Start the fightin'.
Mr Anorexia
10-05-2007, 6:05 AM
I have alot of work the next 2 days, so would you mind beginning?
I guess there was some find of communication break down. Mr. A is out of the tournament and Lag will take his place for this battle.
Spiffy13
10-05-2007, 11:28 AM
Hm... okay. Lag, you wanna go first?
Also, how long do we have to make each comic again?
Assassin
10-05-2007, 11:29 AM
Nooooooooooooooooooo...
Hm... okay. Lag, you wanna go first?
Also, how long do we have to make each comic again?
Two days. The first attack needs to be made by Saturday at 11:59 EST.
Nooooooooooooooooooo...
Sorry. Dropping Mr.A allowed me to even out the rounds and I wasn't really comfortable letting someone get through the first round free. Plus you guys confused me.
I was supposed to get a free ride! :argh:
Anywho, sure, I'll go first. I'ma git you man-ina-can!
If Relaps can double, so can I! Yeah!
http://s95.photobucket.com/albums/l149/Poshnak/th_Sassyvsfred002.png (http://i95.photobucket.com/albums/l149/Poshnak/Sassyvsfred002.png)
The first spud has been fired!
Vortex
10-05-2007, 11:34 PM
I personally have no clue what happened in that comic, Lag. I've been trying to make sense of it for about 10 minutes. Perhaps I'm a moron. :frown:
Spiffy13
10-05-2007, 11:47 PM
He put something in my rocket and I blew up.
I love the "tally ho!" btw xD
For the sake of Vortex.
1. Fred prepares for attack.
2. He attacks.
3. Sassy gets disturbed while relaxing.
4. Panned to see Fred still charging.
5. Sassy gets confused as to his attack.
6. Sassy finds a potato!
7. Sassy remembers the assailant.
8. Whoosh!
9. Sassy's taken for a ride!
10. Sassy panics!
11. The potato!
12. Like clogging a car's exhaust, only with jets n such.
13. Fred's grim realization.
14. Boom
15. Stuck the landing.
Interesting, I wouldnt of got it without the explaination though.
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 1:24 AM
wasn't that hard to understand it for me :P
Flyingburittopanda
10-06-2007, 4:31 AM
HaHa loved the Awesome sunglasses landing part. =]
I understood it easily and im an Ar-tard.
Good work.
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 4:36 PM
I'm working on mine :)
It was nice though it took me a while to figure out what happened.
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 6:14 PM
Is Sassy a sasquach?
If I don't get an answer I'm just gonna pretend he is :P
He is.
Although sometimes I like to think he's just a wandering hobo with attitude...
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 9:12 PM
Okay, I'm done. Just gotta scan it and add a little touches :)
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 10:09 PM
Ugghh... when I scanned it it came out all... bad. It's hard to read/see the things. So I decided to go over it with a pen, and now it's too smudgy >.<
Which one should I use??
Bah, sorry for double post :(
Had the same problem, luckily I was able to print a copy and pen it over. You still have like, a day? So you should be able to fix it up.
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 10:18 PM
I have 41 minutes...... :(
I have 41 minutes...... :(
Old 10-05-2007, 11:58 PM + 2 days = 10-07-2007 11:58PM est
No you have another day.
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 10:23 PM
Two days. The first attack needs to be made by Saturday at 11:59 EST.
I think that means I have 41 minutes :P
I think that means I have 41 minutes :P
I think it says "THE FIRST ATTACK" which was made at 11:58PM EST yesterday.
You have until tomorrow at 11:58 pm EST.
Spiffy13
10-06-2007, 10:39 PM
Ahhh... I totally misunderstood, lol. Thanks for clearing things up :)
PyroOwned
10-07-2007, 6:38 AM
Heh, that was alright Lag. I like your character. :douchecock:
Spiffy13
10-07-2007, 5:18 PM
Fred's retaliation:
http://i144.photobucket.com/albums/r180/Deathell/scan0003-1.jpg
If it's too hard or too smudgy to read, just say so.
Fixed the letters.
Ill be honest I thought it was pretty bad. The dialogue and the art.
Spiffy13
10-07-2007, 5:38 PM
damnit... I'll try to make a new one... I guess >.<
I dunno, I thought it was funny in a stupid kind of way, but make sure your second one has some kind of attack, maybe spend a little longer on the art too, but all in all it was that bad.
damnit... I'll try to make a new one... I guess >.<
If you make a new one it has to be in by 11:58 EST today. So 4 and a half hours from now.
Spiffy13
10-07-2007, 6:37 PM
Okay, I'll wait for the next attack.
Just wanted you to know so you didn't get caught. I mean you can try to make a new one and if you don't finish just use the one you have now.
Spiffy13
10-07-2007, 6:43 PM
Anyone have any suggestions on how to make my second one better? (Other then art)
Goblin Boy
10-07-2007, 6:46 PM
Your handwriting is really hard to read. Once you scan it you should re-type it all in photoshop or whatever you're using.
Spiffy13
10-07-2007, 6:47 PM
That's what I thought. Okay, I'll do that. Well... I'll try, lol.
Personally I use a pencil to sketch it first, then when I am happy I draw the final product with a biro, use a rubber to get rid of the pencil lines and done, looks nice and clean and a lot better than one which is drawn as you think.
Fat Sassy will not stand for this! :argh: (or much at all)
Spiffy13
10-07-2007, 7:17 PM
Okay, I fixed the letters in photoshop
LagFish
10-08-2007, 2:00 AM
I think that both of you need to work on the font sizing in your works, it's still hard to read even when the letters are photoshopped because the size is small. Personally I think that there needs to be a tiny bit of story line going rather than just arbitrary humor. However, I like the logic of the potato being turned into french fries.
Spiffy13
10-08-2007, 2:50 AM
Maybe you didn't zoom in. I can read both of ours fine.
LagFish
10-08-2007, 4:03 AM
No, I did zoom in. It's just maybe my monitor is smaller than yours. It doesn't need to be gigantic font, but of reasonable size. It may also have helped that you knew what was being typed.
Spiffy13
10-08-2007, 4:29 AM
True, true. Well, sadly I can't change it now since it's passed the due date. I'll make sure to make the font bigger next time, though :smile:
LagFish
10-08-2007, 4:31 AM
I could read it after a while. Thanks for taking in my suggestion and not being a fag about it. That's a good trait to have in the Showcase.
Spiffy13
10-08-2007, 4:38 AM
Yeah, well I'm not an ass... most of the time :biggrin:
<Funny Introduction>
http://s95.photobucket.com/albums/l149/Poshnak/th_SassyvsFred2ink.png (http://i95.photobucket.com/albums/l149/Poshnak/SassyvsFred2ink.png)
Kevosk
10-08-2007, 7:40 PM
...the fuck?
I don't know who to vote for in this round mostly because you're both so bad :(. Can you explain that one again Lag?
Christ, is it that hard to understand?
I'm gonna start writing a story board for these things.
1. Fat realization.
2. The treachery!
3. Sad Sack Sassy.
4-5. Daring action poses.
6. Futile attack.
7. Flaing arms takes a lot outta you.
8. Tired collapse.
9. Flustered Fred.
10. Am(or RAM)bulance sends Fred soaring.
Spiffy13
10-08-2007, 8:15 PM
...the fuck?
I don't know who to vote for in this round mostly because you're both so bad :(. Can you explain that one again Lag?
Shit, dude. None of these are hard to understand.
I like it, btw, Lag
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 12:24 PM
Well, I was banned for about a day... =/
You still have 5 hours. Besides being banned should have just given you more time to do it.
You guys are also the last we're waiting on to finish round 1.
Hey, at least it's not entirely my fault.
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 5:43 PM
okay, so I have until 9?
Dodger
10-10-2007, 5:52 PM
I say you disqualify both of them and move me on.
MistyTehMoose
10-10-2007, 6:12 PM
I don't feel that they should move to the next round if awesome comic makers like Mecha and Ox are missing out.
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 7:06 PM
Wow, you guys are assholes. I gave it my best shot, damn.
Anyways, I'm done. About to scan it.
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 7:15 PM
http://i144.photobucket.com/albums/r180/Deathell/scan0001-2.jpg
Woohoo! A minute early!
Worked my ass off for the past hour...
I don't feel that they should move to the next round if awesome comic makers like Mecha and Ox are missing out.
Yeah, really. Can I replace someone's spot in this match??
Both of you, shut up.
Vote here: http://forums.explosm.net/showthread.php?t=9833
One choice, everyone vote please. The poll will close in 2 days. Your choice should be based on humor, art and creativity.
Here is their match again to refresh your memory:http://forums.explosm.net/showthread.php?t=8973
Talk about this match in here if you need to.
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 7:27 PM
I know I'm probably gonna lose :lol:
Tempest
10-10-2007, 7:50 PM
I don't mean any offense to either of you, but I really didn't laugh at either of them. For being hand-drawn, I thought they were pretty decent with the art (At least, it's better than I can do, which isn't saying much, I know). In the end, I'd say Spiffy13's was the better one, because I had the same problem as someone else in the thread, I couldn't understand what happened in Lag's very well. Just as a bit of constructive criticism, you should both work on your comedy a bit. I have a pretty highball sense of humor, so I wouldn't take my word as law, but I didn't think either were very funny. They had potential, though, at the very least.
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 7:52 PM
I don't mean any offense to either of you, but I really didn't laugh at either of them. For being hand-drawn, I thought they were pretty decent with the art (At least, it's better than I can do, which isn't saying much, I know). In the end, I'd say Spiffy13's was the better one, because I had the same problem as someone else in the thread, I couldn't understand what happened in Lag's very well. Just as a bit of constructive criticism, you should both work on your comedy a bit. I have a pretty highball sense of humor, so I wouldn't take my word as law, but I didn't think either were very funny. They had potential, though, at the very least.
Appreciate it, bro :smile:
I'll try to get my comedy better.
I can see the main problem in mine is how cluttered they end up. I'm gonna try n stick to less panels or a smoother transition between them.
Overall, I'm gonna work my ass off for the next round. (If I get into it)
Dodger
10-10-2007, 7:59 PM
This was the worst match of the competition so far. To be honest I don't know who to vote for.... in a bad way. Both of you guys' art was mediocre, none were creative, but I think Lag's had a bit more comedic value, so be it.
Tempest
10-10-2007, 8:07 PM
I can see the main problem in mine is how cluttered they end up. I'm gonna try n stick to less panels or a smoother transition between them.
Overall, I'm gonna work my ass off for the next round. (If I get into it)
The amount of panels was good, as you said yourself, it was the transitions that killed it. One moment I'm watching someone pick up a potato, the next he's hanging on the tailpipe of a jet. It was just overall hard to follow because of the confusion.
Cheesymaroon
10-10-2007, 9:26 PM
Wow this was very hard, in the "they both suck to some horrible extent" kind of way.
Mr. Crow
10-10-2007, 9:30 PM
Yeah, honestly I couldn't even manage to read your comics. I took one look at them and cringed. I like Lag more than Spiffy13 though, so I'll vote for him.
Kevosk
10-10-2007, 9:32 PM
This is the only round I won't vote in because I have no idea who was better. I mean, in all honesty, MS Paint would have looked SO much cleaner, plus you have the option to edit when you're done.
Hah, oh you guys.
So yes, by now we get the point that we did poorly this round.
The goal of this competition is to make fun comics and entertain the audience; and that's precisely what I'm going to, above all, aim to do with this stuff. I'll put thorough work into improvement and do all I can with my time when working on these.
What I'd like is aside from "Ah, they both sucked, kill me" is to at least put in some constructive criticism on to how we can improve our work so the remainder of our presence in this competition won't be so unbearable. And I promise, I will do the best I can to make this enjoyable for you all.
Spiffy13
10-10-2007, 10:40 PM
Hah, oh you guys.
So yes, by now we get the point that we did poorly this round.
The goal of this competition is to make fun comics and entertain the audience; and that's precisely what I'm going to, above all, aim to do with this stuff. I'll put thorough work into improvement and do all I can with my time when working on these.
What I'd like is aside from "Ah, they both sucked, kill me" is to at least put in some constructive criticism on to how we can improve our work so the remainder of our presence in this competition won't be so unbearable. And I promise, I will do the best I can to make this enjoyable for you all.
Couldn't have said it better myself, man.
Tempest
10-10-2007, 11:01 PM
Just ignore them, almost everyone in this contest thinks it was done wrong and that they are gods of comic making anyway. It's true that it wasn't well done but it wasn't some kind of lost cause like Skittler was. There's plenty of room and potential for improvement.
RabidMonkey
10-11-2007, 3:32 AM
In my opinion, the only half decent comic was Lags first one.
Both of you need to up the jokes. They weren't very funny. The first gave me a smile, the rest, sucked. They had no fighting in it beyond completely twisted stupid logic. The last one would have been much funnier if for example, you threw money at him, and said "You forgot your money, you fat jew!" Just a suggestion :indiff: In other words, if you had a joke.
Now, your art was mediocre, lags was the best in my opinion, but both of your guys art wasn't brilliant.
Creativity. The first had some ingenuity, stuffing his newly found potato into the exhaust. The french fries was okish. The rest was crap.
Lag gets my vote. At least practise your art if you can ok? So there is your constuctive criticism. And it's good to see that you actually said "I'll work to improve" than making an arse of yourself and saying. "WHY DIDN'T YOU LIKE MY COMICS YOU FAGS!!!!!11!!!"
MistyTehMoose
10-11-2007, 9:10 AM
I'm voting for Lag, because I like him more.
As for art, Lag, seeing as you are going through to the next round, my only suggestion would be to un-clutter your comics a bit.
It's okay to do different sized frames, but when it comes down to you having to explain the comic, it means you have to simplify the layout a little bit. You have two days, take your time, and don't rush it.
Tyler_Legrand
10-11-2007, 10:58 AM
Lag is the lesser of two evils.
Zebbs
10-11-2007, 11:00 AM
Lags Character had a bit more meaning than a floating head.
Lags moves on to round 2.
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